Comments on: New Online Portfolio http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/ A journey through Major Depressive Disorder and the lives that surround it. Sat, 06 Sep 2008 03:02:45 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6.1 By: Professor B. http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20146 Professor B. Sat, 08 Mar 2008 03:46:10 +0000 http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20146 no worries! no worries!

]]> By: John http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20124 John Thu, 06 Mar 2008 14:17:04 +0000 http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20124 Actually, I liked your comment a lot. I decided to use it verbatim. Thanks! Actually, I liked your comment a lot. I decided to use it verbatim. Thanks!

]]> By: John http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20123 John Thu, 06 Mar 2008 14:13:07 +0000 http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20123 Professor B. Thanks for the comments. I'll certainly put them to good use. Professor B.

Thanks for the comments. I’ll certainly put them to good use.

]]> By: Professor B. http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20119 Professor B. Thu, 06 Mar 2008 04:55:51 +0000 http://www.theglasspeople.net/2008/03/05/new-online-portfolio/#comment-20119 Well written up until this sentence: "I'm a creative, passionate, devoted, enthusiastic leader looking for the my right place in this world." First off, there's too many adjectives in list form, and it comes off rather overwhelming. You could eliminate some words, or re-arrange them to say something like "I am an enthusiastic leader devoted to sharing my passion for technology through creative means". Also, "for the my right place" doesn't mean. Aside from the grammatical error, that little part about looking for your place makes it sound as if you're a bit aimless, which presumably isn't true. Hope this was helpful. You can feel free to disregard: English Professors don't know everything all the time! Well written up until this sentence: “I’m a creative, passionate, devoted, enthusiastic leader looking for the my right place in this world.”

First off, there’s too many adjectives in list form, and it comes off rather overwhelming. You could eliminate some words, or re-arrange them to say something like “I am an enthusiastic leader devoted to sharing my passion for technology through creative means”.

Also, “for the my right place” doesn’t mean. Aside from the grammatical error, that little part about looking for your place makes it sound as if you’re a bit aimless, which presumably isn’t true.

Hope this was helpful. You can feel free to disregard: English Professors don’t know everything all the time!

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